In my book Swordfighting for Writers, Game Designers, and Martial Artists, I devote about 45 pages to advice to writers. I thought the readers here at Black Gate might like me to expand a bit on some of the points I made there. Let me start with a quote:
There are several distinct skills that go into a good written fight. They are:
- visualizing the fight accurately, to avoid describing impossible actions;
- maintaining dramatic tension and pacing the fight to be exciting;
- maintaining characterization: making sure that the characters’ actions in the fight give the reader the sense of their personalities that you want; and
- serving the plot, so that the fight meets the needs of the story and is not just shoehorned in.
Dramatic tension, characterization, and plot are key skills for a novelist; ask M. Harold Page if you don’t believe me. Visualizing a swordfight accurately is a much less common writing skill.
Assuming that training in actual swordsmanship for a few years is out of the question, here are three ways to get it right, if you want to go into technical detail (which blade goes where).
1) The absolute best way to do this is to get a friend and a couple of sticks (or swords!), and go through it live. This will prevent your sword magically jumping through your opponent without actually cutting him in half, or from striking in two places at the same time (both errors I have encountered in published fiction).
In the absence of friends or sticks, what can you do?
2) The next best option is to cheat. Pick a movie with a sword fight in it that would work for your scene, and go through it frame by frame, and describe what you see. By all means make some changes, but Picasso was right: good artists borrow; great artists steal.
3) Last and very much least: work it out in your head. This is what most writers do, I think. You can make this a bit more reliable by using a pencil in each hand and fighting yourself, but the results will be spotty at best.
Once you have it written down, I’d suggest sending it to someone who does actually fight with swords. MHP, me, there are many of us out there.
But my Number 1 top tip for writing swordfights? Avoid technical description altogether. Your average reader does not want to know exactly which bit goes where; she wants to know why they are fighting, what the stakes are, and how the fight is going. Technical descriptions of what the swords are doing are usually pretty tedious. For example:
Alfonso the Evil One forced Our Hero back across the tavern with a flurry of cuts and thrusts, until OH bumped into the bar. Ever resourceful, OH snatched up a flagon of ale and threw it into AEO’s face. The leather vessel bounced harmlessly off A’s forehead, but cheap acid brew stung his eyes, and he backed off for a crucial second. OH recovered and thrust hard at A’s belly etc etc…
Alfonso the Evil one attacked Our Hero with a mandritto fendente to the head; OH parried, but in the tempo of his parry, AEO cut around with a roverso fendente. OH stepped back to gain time to make a second parry, but AEO was so fast, that even after his roverso fendente was parried, he had time to thrust at OH’s face… dammit, we are still a long way from that beer, and I’m bored already!
So my Number 2 top tip: avoid jargon. How many of your readers know what a mandritto fendente is? (It’s a forehand descending blow). And “in the tempo of his parry”? Sure, you can figure it out, but while you’re figuring, you’re not caught up in the drama.
If you have found this useful, and you want more top tips (and perhaps want to know how the fight continues) let me know in the comments; I have a lot to say about swords and swordfighting…
Guy Windsor is a professional swordsman and writer; he founded The School of European Swordsmanship (www.swordschool.com) in 2001, and his first book was published in 2004. Find him at guywindsor.net/blog.